Stolen

[mindless1]

a vacated dream
once a living
human being
draft of death
silent decay
once upon a
lifeless grey
shameless water
cold and clear
listen to them
wash away
room of sorrow
mysterious blame
childless mother
crying insane
lights fall silent
truth applied
we awaken
have been invited
crimson christ
with broken nail
angel with the
blackest halo
feed upon with
vampire lungs
drink the blood
of songs unsung
trickled down
a stairwell of sleep
where magik stumbled
swept so deep
the prison of
her aliby
the only one
who stood beside
a crippled tongue
a darkened life
redempted sight
sickness obsessed
leafless trees
of lawless heaven
stillness haunting
humming screaming
ripping tearing
killing bleeding
watching waiting
tasting hate
of everconsuming
drawing fate
bloodless ego
flat and white
has she appeased
their appetite?
knives are grinning
fangs pretend
as if not to have
been listening
there was
a vase of tears
one for every
stolen year
for every man
who ever took
her mind away
from her world's
lonesome play
her stolen kiss
the last degree
perfected love
a family
forgotten by
her sanity

[Aaroneet]

Slightly cliche, but otherwise well-written.

[HumanePain]

Intriguing, but somehow it wasn't all tied together. A lot of varied images.

For example, the beginning could go like this (if I may):

A vacated dream
where there was once
a living human being
is now nothing
but the draft of death
blowing silent decay.

[FireAndIce]

as my Masters of Aesthetic Clan claim, there is no such thing as to criticize poems...
...and as I claim, it´s a blessed state of mind with subjected intelect that makes us write poetry...

but in addition, well, you really could write a reliable Oxford Dictionary of Contemporary Gothic...at least, all the words you used should be there...

[mindless1]

cliche? How?

[Aaroneet]

I meant that the subject matter has just been covered by plenty of other writers. It's not a big deal. Really. The poem was still well-written, as I've said before.