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Old 08-16-2008, 01:28 AM   #1
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Nuclear Winter

No warning is given, lucky to be in my shelter
A flash of blinding light would turn it all to glass
Heat would sink and linger for a moment
With the slightest touch scorching atomic levels
I'm really not so lucky. I have to rebuild my world
And I can't get out of my shelter.
I'm hungry.
I'm alone.
I'm thirsty.
If I were to open the door, the very air would melt me
I can't leave and I must, I want and need to exit
But fallout lingers for a lifetime it seems
How long must I stay here, starving?
Blaming myself for not letting myself die when I should have.
I need out. I NEED OUT!
So how do I want to die?
Starved and too weak to move?
Or not so quick, but surely painful
But still quicker.
I'm so hungry...
Why couldn't I simply dissolve in the blast?
So... the question remains.
How do I want to die?
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Old 08-16-2008, 02:04 AM   #2
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I think the title is very unique, and it includes winter, which makes it even better.
I like this actually, especially these these lines:

A flash of blinding light would turn it all to glass
Heat would sink and linger for a moment
With the slightest touch scorching atomic levels


I'm not big on the ending though.
I like the concept of a question ending, but I think it should be a more not so obvious one, maybe give it the same meaning, but different words.
Overall though, I really like it. =]
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