My little and humble contribution...

[Isaloween]

Fortress.

Calm is the wind,
That blows in the trees of solitude.
Empty is the air,
That flows as certitude.

As the caress of darkness,
Confess the distress,
The lost freedom of the mind,
Makes the escape blind.

Will I ever get,
Out of this troubled loneliness...
Will I ever let,
Anyone in the fortress...

[magnus13]

not bad, I like the last stansa. somehow I think it would make a good corus/refrain for a song. perhaps lost freedom of mind or caress of the darkness to balance out the rythm a little ?

[Isaloween]

It's interesting that you say that actualy because I wrote it to be a song at the start.

I have more stuff but I'd take my time to post since I'm not too sure of myself lol.... but yeah, I manage, amongst a lot of crap to insert a few nice things here and there...

[magnus13]

thats cool I throw 9/10ths of what I write in the trash, or it never even makes it to paper.

[Isaloween]

yeah well, if you really try to do something good, that's usualy what happens... i'm working on a book at the moment and it takes me ages to write and re write a single page lol this will take me years!

[magnus13]

cool, I don't do well at narative proes myself, the dialog part is just beyond me. anyone who can write dialog and not make it sound contrived has my eternal respect.

[Isaloween]

that's my big problem... I'm onto the dialogue and the whole book is going to be a dialogue lol so wish me good luck! I'll need it big time!