Longing

TheFeatheredÆtheling · 06-05-2010, 03:43 PM

Longing

I fear not curses, threats, or blows
Aimed at me by my countless foes.
My skin ~ my heart as well ~ has scarred
O'er time, like armour tempered hard.

But lo! The wounds caused by a friend
Are much more difficult to mend.

Oh how I long for one who'll be
A good and faithful friend to me ~
Who'll not my fragile trust betray
Or break my heart and walk away.

If it be fated; if I find
That special one I keep in mind,
To her, I'll fast my life devote
And on her tender kindness dote.

Then we'll ~ together ~ boldly face
The sorrows of this earthly place.

kiddo · 06-05-2010, 10:16 PM

thats well thats just a fucking good poem

magnus13 · 10-10-2010, 10:22 PM

a damn good poem !

Versus · 10-11-2010, 03:41 PM

I wish I was so articulate! It doesn't strike a chord with me, but I can still appreciate how difficult it would be for me to write that.

Isaloween · 10-20-2010, 02:54 AM

I admire.... What can I say except I'd love to be able to write like that!

May I ask though: lo!= lord? ... and O'er = Over?...

TheFeatheredÆtheling · 10-20-2010, 06:15 PM

Thanks for the compliment. "Lo" is an exclamation to draw someone's attention. Basically, it means "look!" I mean to say, "look at these wounds..."

O'er does mean "over". This is an elision. The "v" is dropped in order to make the word conform to the poem's rhythm. It's pronounced something like "oar" here. Elisions are common in old poetry and hymns.

However, both of these examples are archaic and not often used anymore. I personally like to incorporate dated English into my poetry because it's much more flexible and I'm nostalgic.

Isaloween · 10-21-2010, 12:51 AM

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However, both of these examples are archaic and not often used anymore. I personally like to incorporate dated English into my poetry

That's what I'd like to learn about... what you call archaic and dated english... I'm lost in all of this and not sure I'd make the difference :o( ... And that's a pity because I find it beautifull!

TheFeatheredÆtheling · 10-22-2010, 10:58 PM

Isaloween, many older English words and forms are beautiful to me as well. There is definitely a group of people to whom archaic English appeals. Honestly, I don't think that Early Modern English or other dated English will ever truly disappear thanks to great and important literature such as Shakespeare's, the King James Bible, and countless other classic works. In academia and to the nostalgic, at least, it will always have a place.

By the way, please have a look at my blog if you get the chance; I've posted new poems of different sorts there. Your feedback would be greatly appreciated.

Isaloween · 10-23-2010, 03:30 AM

I will, but, as you could see in what I posted myself, i'm not very clever LOL so I don't know if my feedback is going to be very objective... Nevertheless, I'll do my best :o) and thanks again for taking time to explain all of the above to me.

TheFeatheredÆtheling · 10-24-2010, 11:25 AM

Don't belittle yourself. I don't know if you're clever or not, but your advice is always welcome as far as I'm concerned.

the-nihilist · 10-24-2010, 04:25 PM

I liked it.

TheFeatheredÆtheling · 10-24-2010, 09:35 PM

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Originally Posted by the-nihilist

I liked it.

'Not the talkative type, I see... What do you here?

Isaloween · 10-24-2010, 11:53 PM

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Don't belittle yourself.

Lol, I don't, I'm just realistic, there is some things for which I'm clever, and poetry is just not part of it. But I will keep telling you what I think though. No worries :o)