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06-15-2008, 08:54 AM
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Join Date: Aug 2006
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A short poem
I wrote this at about 5:00 am, so bear with me.
Death is a way of life
If you perceive it from the right angle
It is wise not to become enamored
Lest you become entangled
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06-15-2008, 08:57 AM
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At best, it was cute and whimsical. Almost like a proverb. It's actually not that bad. I could see some character in a story talking like this.
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06-15-2008, 08:58 AM
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I liked it.
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06-15-2008, 09:01 AM
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Thanks, it isn't meant to be serious or nothin'.
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06-15-2008, 10:51 AM
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It does indeed sound proverby, but I'm not really sure what you're trying to say.
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06-15-2008, 10:53 AM
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Join Date: Nov 2006
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I like it. Beautiful and brief.
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Originally Posted by Joker_in_the_Pack
At some point, you need to look yourself in the mirror and realize that what other people did to you does not define you as a person. You and your actions define who you are as a person. It's up to you to be a good person, in spite of all the evil you've faced. In fact, it should be because of the evil you see that it's good you do. Be the change you want in the world. Next time someone tells me that they're an asshole because they've had a bad life, I'm stabbing them in the eye with a spork.
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06-15-2008, 01:50 PM
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Join Date: Aug 2006
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Originally Posted by Apathy's_Child
It does indeed sound proverby, but I'm not really sure what you're trying to say.
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Oh, I thought it was obvious....
Life can be a "death" sentence if you choose to perceive it that way (looking at only the negative). Don't become obsessed with it (enamored), or you will become too wrapped up in the negative aspects of life.
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06-15-2008, 02:58 PM
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Join Date: Jan 2006
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I'm not crazy about it.
It's too obvious and cliche.
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06-15-2008, 03:12 PM
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Join Date: Jan 2007
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Originally Posted by Underwater Ophelia
I'm not crazy about it.
It's too obvious and cliche.
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I swear we work on the same brainwaves.
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06-16-2008, 06:45 AM
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Join Date: Aug 2006
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Originally Posted by Underwater Ophelia
I'm not crazy about it.
It's too obvious and cliche.
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Hmm, I see what you mean. I wasn't trying to make it all "deep" and shit. I was going for the cutesy/whimsical crap.
Also, again, I was dead tired when I wrote it.
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