If I Loved You

[Jillian May Scortfil]

You want to know.
I can see it in your eyes.
If I loved you.
If I love you.
But if you knew.
If you knew how I love you.

If I loved you I would tell you.

I would tell you how my fingers long to caress your back when you stand at my side.
How I feel your breaths as though they were my own.
How when you hurt I hurt, and when you smile I smile.

I would tell you how I love to watch you. I love to watch you laugh, I love to watch you sleep, I love…

I love.
If I loved you.
I would tell you.
But I can’t.
So I don’t.
Love you.
I loved you once.
I loved you.

[Minyaliel]

It doesn't flow very well, in my honest opinion. Perhaps you should look at the rhythm; I'm not certain, but that might be the thing to consider re- enforcing.

[Jillian May Scortfil]

it's not exactly a poem... it's just something I had to write, just to get it out of me... sorry if it seems confusing...!

[BloodyLivingVampire]

i like it
though i can't fall in love i want to
sometimes i feel it's impossible
and that's sad

[Jillian May Scortfil]

I know how you feel... it's exactly how I'm feeling this time... all my friends have found someone in their lives and I'm the only one who's NOT in love and lonely! (that last one was from a song of HIM calles "In love and lonely" :P)... anyway, thanks a lot for appreciating my effort!

[BloodyLivingVampire]

your welcome! :-)