Just another thing

[KontanKarite]

If when you look upon this mirror
No friend or lover, will reflect so clear
You will see only yourself in the absence of me
Goodbye forever, for the distance you need
Is the distance of severance and abandon
Upon return from your journey to parts unknown
You will find nothing of value, just dust and bone
Though wraiths may follow you wherever you roam
No curse I laid upon you, just one of your own
You may find happiness in simple blindness
I will however, harbor abandonment
When you leave that door, find peace
For even I will leave this house
Long before you intend to return to this place
Adieu, traveler, your burden is your guilt

[Underwater Ophelia]

Upon return from your journey to parts unknown
You will find nothing of value, just dust and bone
Though wraiths may follow you wherever you roam
No curse I laid upon you, just one of your own

That's pretty brilliant, and the rhyming is well thought out, but could be improved, I think.

I think the last line is very good, but I don't think it's good as a finishing line.
I think it would sound much better read aloud.

[KontanKarite]

I'm glad you liked it. Yes, it does sound quite swell when read aloud. It has a very spell casting flavor to it... if that makes any sense at all.

[Underwater Ophelia]

I think I know what you mean.

[TurquoiseXx]

A very strong and emotional message. I like it a lot.

[VioletPrison]

Very well done!

[HumanePain]

I liked this compression of a lifetime and it's ending into a journey.
:snaps fingers:

[KontanKarite]

Thanks, guys.