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[Keni]

the one track smile of a thousand stars
makes me wonder where you are
you love every colour and the colours are blue
the birds pass me by, in flying and flew

the pinstripes whisper of Lock Stock and Barrel
she splinters my bones and sucks on the marrow
the choir shall kill, the killers shall sing
the needle will bite and then comes the sting

the world will then spin in splinters of none
one number i hate and that number is one
antelopes stir the grasses of dreams
the diamond I hate has a beautiful gleam

I march, lost in fury, down forbidden streets
I then meet the deadlines that nobody meets
I sew fateful stitches and rip out the squares
for lack of a sleeve and no heart to wear





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PLAGIARISM SUCKS .


so dont do it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Keni, I really do not want to seem like I strike at you, but..
This really sounds like a very morbid children's rhyme.
"you love every colour and the colours are blue
the birds pass me by, in flying and flew"
Namely "you love every colour and the colours are blue"
What does that even mean?
You made it rhyme twice a strophe, well congratulations. But it doesn't make a whole lot of sense.
"She loves every colour, but they are all blue." is what you are actually saying here,
And all so you could rhyme something with flew.
Please, consider next time you write poetry, 'Does this actually make sense, or am I rambling?'
Again, I do not mean to offend you, I truly am trying to make you see my point.

[JCC]

Originally Posted by Anarasha

twice a strophe

The only rational explanation I can think of is that this is a bizzare play on the word 'catastrophe'.

No, strophe is an actual word, not often used though. It is closer to the danish word for the same thing though, so it is the natural word for me to use.
(Strophe = Stanza)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stanza
(Note: I may have misunderstood the use as the danish word is strofe)

[JCC]

Anarasha just found a gap in my comprehensive vocabulary. What the fuck is going on here?

[LakitaJackson]

Originally Posted by JCC

Anarasha just found a gap in my comprehensive vocabulary. What the fuck is going on here?

You've been out buying Pikachu pyjamas in exchange for the possibility of receiving fellatio instead of studying like a good little boy.

[JCC]

Originally Posted by LakitaJackson

You've been out buying Pikachu pyjamas in exchange for the possibility of receiving fellatio instead of studying like a good little boy.

Ya know, I didn't even get a hug for that shit.

JCC - There's a reason I don't get laid you know... :P

[LakitaJackson]

Originally Posted by JCC

Ya know, I didn't even get a hug for that shit.

Awww.... tell ya what. If you're ever in Compton, I'll toss you a quickie and a dime fo' free. (;

Originally Posted by Anarasha

JCC - There's a reason I don't get laid you know... :P

We know...