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Old 09-05-2005, 07:40 PM   #1
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I started writing at random, and I hope it's appreciated:

Her skin smelled of paint thinner. It was just one of those things that I noticed. The air wasn’t even air at all, but rather, a form of matter non-existent fluctuating in a blend of all three of the commonly observed states. Her hair flowed in stark contrast to the solidity of the fluid air around us. It was as though the world was simultaneously reconstructing itself amidst its collapse, and I was bearing witness to it all.

As I tried to match her stride, I felt her eyes lingering on me from the moments long since she’d turned away and begun her march forward. Everything became so undeniably significant, and my brain struggled to maintain a state of order, as anarchy ensued. I could feel the wind caressing her flesh, and I could smell the words radiating from her mind. It was as though reality itself had been shaped by an imagination not yet exposed to the laws of reality, in a world where anything was possible, and boundaries were not even a concept birthed into such a world.

I felt the snap of her eyes as they peeled away all those moments before, and then we stopped. Heaven tasted of a blend of coffee grinds and burnt hair, and yet, it wasn’t at all an unpleasant sensation. Such things were beautiful in a world without rules, and without a definition of beauty. Everything was beautiful. Beauty was everything… and ignorance partnered with innocence paved a path toward a hulking mass of nothingness, substantiated in a corporeal mass. We continued the arduous march with such a sinful ease that it seemed improbable that this was real, but her face manifested right before my own, and I could taste her breath (almond, with a hint of cinnamon carrying forward) and I knew beyond doubt that fantasy was simply one of the manifestations of a so-called reality that could not deny the consistency of fact dwindling amongst this intoxicating fantasy.

Her words dissipated quickly as she uttered them, a sense of urgency in her tone that I interpreted as nothing less and nothing more. It was as though reality had peeled itself away from the sidelines. Corruption? Infidelity? Ignorance? Bliss. I couldn’t understand, and yet I’d already begun to utter a response, unwillingly.

Her eyes, they pierced me without mercy, and I could see my own soul (my essence; whatever you want to label it, it was there in an inconsistent form). She then looked into my eyes, and I stumbled. Those two gaping voids inside of her head were entrancing, capturing the very basic truth sustained in this unreality.
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Old 09-05-2005, 10:49 PM   #2
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This is beautiful! I certainly appreciate it! *claps* Very good! Very very good!
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Old 09-16-2005, 01:51 AM   #3
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i really like that... mine seems a bit longer though... ive done it before... heres the copy...


I remember the first times, when all times began from this breaking. I looked forward to the moment when all times brought them forward and changed the world. It opened itself up to me in moments of clarity as they changed and shifted like a tapestry of coiling threads that I changed at will. I remember all this with a focus that only a diamond that was fine cut and chopped could gather. Each moment seemed to overwhelm me in each passing memory that I saw fly by in rolling waves that come off to shore.
Should I be scared when all this collapses over me in tumbling walls of my own sanctity?
Could I ever turn back time and allow myself to undo the things I have done? I think not of these trivial questions. I simply reveal to everyone I meet that they are but small threads in the coils of a great work of art that stretches itself into the world in a fabric that is simply reality.
I walked over the shores of a beach that cast itself away into a tempest that was hidden from the minds eye. I opened the gates to a hidden realm where only the sun sets after it rained. I have tasted fruit from the void and lived to tell the tale from a nightmare that plays over and over in my head. Should I be someone else I wondered at times? Do I show myself as being the one who must not be for I am the object of all that is reality? Why is this not real but surely is real? I have tasted fear and felt taste. Yet, I have not understood a moment when it comes up from behind me like time catching up to correct the mistakes of man. Am I seen through the eyes of millions or seen through the eye of a machine?
I remember looking down from a mountain peak and seeing only mist rise up to caress me with motherly touch. I remember jumping from the clouds and feeling the rush of life echo inside me as I stay empty to engulf all matter and existence. I washed up on the shores of my mind and wandered in dreams beyond that of positive reality. Woke up in my own sanity and bathed under the rays of light that pierced the trees to shed me tears from my body. All this I have done and still I do not recall ever doing such events. I have seen the worlds collide in explosions so vast and beautiful they can only be described as worldly under the inspection of man. I have watched two suns set as each pulled out from under itself a rug of space to simply drift under and find each other.
All this I have done and still do not understand myself. Should I be a sinner for thought? Am I evil in my ways and my path? Am I free or am I chained down to the reality I have set for myself? Should I be the one who must break free and show the world just what it means to be alive? They would not understand me. They would burn me like a witch to a fire that duels with them the hatred and the fear of unknowing. I am the bygone being that should not exist, yet I breathe and eat their food and sit at their table and break bread to drink their wine. I watched as kingdoms rose and fell under the red sun as he bled heat to the dying world of man. I cried as the cities I once knew fell to dust and ash under the reign of man. I have made love to the beast within me and fell to the hatred outside before I lingered in a moment to late for my undoing.
Is this real or is it a place for my mind to wander when I tire of the life I have to offer the world? Maybe I should be the one walking alone to find the edge of a knife at my throat and taste the blood lift up and out from my neck like a faucet left open for the night to dwindle the precious water out of the world for all man to drink dry. Have I come so far and still not have understood the ways of man? Have I learned everything and still not been able to tell the world the truth about the evil that man has done?
I have spoken with the highlands and cried when the eagles took the sky. I have seen the power of man and watched as it crumbled to dirt and dismay when the world collided with the sky. I held the last breath of a creature that would be later burned up in a car and used as gas. I sobbed when the rise of my son fell to the rise of the winds. All this I have done without knowing and it scares me to think that I have done nothing at all. In time, everything will heal and someday the world will turn upside down before I understand my self and correct my balance. I have wandered the streets of a cobble stone city that sinks under the rising moon. I watched as men collected embers to feast on the fire before shivering over the night to hope for the warmth of day.
Walking alone and never being seen. I am the ghost of time and still I wander on as it passes me by. Capturing memory after memory and always finding myself back at the start. A circle is the most powerful form of defense and it may be the truth that holds everyone back. If only they knew then I would not be here. I rise under the fires of rebellion and feast under the banner of hatred. I destroyed Carthage and burned down the cities of sand. All this I have done for man and still they do not understand why.
I have feasted on the blood of millions and boiled the seas to see the outcome. Maybe when the world ends I will be seen playing a fiddle on a tower to high up to be noticed. Soon when the world burns to signal the rise and fall of man I would be singing with the sirens as ships fail to see shore. I cant seem to find my own words to see how love can be. I only waite and sit and take it day by day just so I can say that I am truly in love.
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Old 12-05-2005, 03:21 PM   #4
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Hmmm.. here:
She gazed into the distance. "I honestly didn't kill him." kept going in and out of her thoughts. Her blood boiled just thinking of that idiotic look on her face. "You're the reason he died. It was suicide. It's all your fault! It's all your fault!!". I can't stand these thoughts any longer. Standing at your tombstone, I begin to wonder. Was it really my fault? "It's not like you handed him the knife. He did it all on his own." Why won't I cry? Am I so evil? I don't care either way. I don't! I gave you flowers, what more do you want? I'm leaving. Rot in hell.. "Rot in hell... rot in hell...rot in hell.."
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Old 12-05-2005, 03:52 PM   #5
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Wow, all of it is good. ^.^ I am starting to write a little, but i am not doing as well as i had hoped...
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Old 12-05-2005, 04:22 PM   #6
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I approached the magnificent doors, feeling insignificant in their presence. Although they were grand, and the architecture astounding, they also told a story. It wasn’t an obvious story depicted by pictures carved into the woodwork or words that spelled out a plot. No, this was a subtle story that one could only understand by studying the patterns made by blood shed during war or the dents made by the blunt weapons of battle trying to force entry into what seemed a forgotten fortress from which I occupied.
The air smelled damp and somewhat musty, for the lake which once lived at the top of the mountain now transformed itself into a river flowing over the side of the castle and leaking through some of the cracks in the walls where moss began to grow.
I pushed one of the doors open with great effort, and with that a bitter draft blew inside. An enchanting sight was cast upon my eyes! I could see for miles! – The winged creatures circling about their nests or their prey, the sky azure, and the white frosted mountains. Oh, how they shimmered in the sunlight! As I began to walk forward, a valley started to appear before my eyes, revealing itself as I moved closer to the edge of the platform I stood upon.
“It’s quite astounding, isn’t it,” a voice said to the left of me. A figure emerged from the shadow of the giant structure I just came from.
“Where are…”
He held his index finger to his lips to symbolize silence. I found him quite eccentric, wearing a deep green robe about ankle-length, with boots made with some kind of hide. The man carried a bag of the same kind of material as his shoes; it looked as though it was fairly light, but he guarded it as though he carried a life that wasn’t his. I didn’t doubt his, or the contents of the bag’s, importance. His eyes looked so deep! – A depth that extended far beyond the greenness of the valley below the cliff we rested on. It was though he was lost in both thought and consciousness.
Minutes passed were he remained stationary, until something unknown broke the silence. I felt a presence around us although I couldn’t pinpoint it. The strange man most definitely could sense it too.
He seemed to align himself with something that was only visible, and possibly only existed, to him, and he outstretched his arms towards the sky as one praying might outstretch their arms to the heavens.
All I could do was stand there and watch, admiring, even though he seemed to have forgotten I was there. His eyes were now closed, and a blue aura manifested itself around his hands giving the impression he was carrying blue fire.
For several moments he stood like this unaware of the world changing around him. I turned around to once again respect this divine atmosphere in which I found myself. I could see the stream metamorphosed from the ancient lake and now leading its way through the jungle seeking out its destiny in the sea ahead like a warrior on foreign territory.
An impetuous thud jolted me from my trance. From somewhere over on the crag adjacent to ours on the right, came two slender shafts of wood carved to a point and dipped in tar. Everything happened so rapidly that it appeared to materialize in slow motion. The unknown bowman launched his weapons of warfare past me, forcing themselves into the old man’s chest, and pinning him to the closed wooden door.
He groaned in agony as the blue fire now turned to black dust, and his flame slowly flickered out as he passed through this world and into the next. It pained me to witness such an incredible man drift so easily into eternal sleep, although I didn’t understand why.
The sky grew dark and all time ceased to exist. All that was left in this void was myself, the old man, and the marksman. I gazed upon the deformed figure of the lifeless man and then to his murderer, and a sense of peace made itself known to me. It was clear I had gained his respect, for he stood tall and looked me in the eye with a glimmer of luminosity and esteem.
All darkness faded first to a distorted reality of the landscape and then to vivid color. The river began to flow more intensely than before, the birds and flyers returned to their territory swooping and diving as if in celebration, and, although subtle, I could feel the temperature rise. When I looked over to the ledge where the archer was, he was nowhere to be found.

I couldn’t help but pause and reminisce all that had just happened, for everything seemed to be unfolding all at once in my mind. I walked over to the old and motionless man and looked straight into his cloudy eyes. “Thank you,” I whispered in gratitude of all his unknown deeds.
Again, I walked over to the edge of the cliff, only this time I sat down and dangled my legs over the edge. Stones budged from their sleep and fell, fell, fell to their destiny. I turned around one last time, but the man had disappeared as well, and I was alone once again.


Another story had been added to the Treasury of Fallen Heroes for the Door to Eternity to leave its brand on all those who chance to live it.

Even the seemingly immortal die.
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Old 12-05-2005, 04:25 PM   #7
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Sorry, I forgot to post an explanation along with that ^. It was an arbitrary writing thing we had to do for class where we wrote down a setting (the first part of the short story), developed a character, and then added the character into the story. It's not my best, but I hope you enjoy.
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