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Old 06-17-2007, 11:34 PM   #1
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my girl, my vampire

i wrote this wen i was sad, i got a few songs, but this is my latest, tell me wwat u think



Dark Revalations: My Girl, My Vampire
joe baker

i see her standin there,
the moonlight flowin through her jet black hair,
the shadows at her feet,
shes the one for me,

i walk up to her and she smiles,
we stand there starin for a while,
and then she laughs and takes my hand,
and we walk away

shes my poisen orchid
my deadly angel,
my pale white gothic girl,
to even look away is painful

shes lying there on a bed of black roses,
with her eyes she wills me to come over,
i fall into her sweet embrace,
i wish i could stay there forever

i wake up, shes nowhere to be seen,
i wonder if it was all a dream,
but on her pillow she left a little note:
'till next time'

shes my poisen orchid,
my deadly angel,
my pale white gothic girl,
when im not with her its painful

that night when im walkin home,
raindrops chillen me to the bone,
i see her standin in the dark,
her eyes locked onto mine

i ran over to embrace her,
never thought that id have to chase her,
she slipped away into the darkness,
and i followed her,

shes my poisen orchid,
my deadly angel,
my pale white gothic girl,
to even look away is painfull

in the darkness we did stay,
untill the end of both our days,
her love was a methanphetamin
we never said a word,

we do not need nobody else,
just me and her all by ourselves,
i know by lookin in her eyes,
she loves me,

shes my poisen orchid,
my deadly angel,
my pale white gothic girl,
without her my life is painful

we were together for eternity,
in the darkness just her and me,
i will love her to the end of days,
she my vampire


i wrote dis, tell me wat u think
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Old 06-17-2007, 11:37 PM   #2
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Old 06-18-2007, 12:09 AM   #3
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Learn the english language.
And make a intro post.
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Old 08-10-2007, 06:12 AM   #4
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could be gothic rap...if there is were such a thing.
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Old 08-10-2007, 06:41 AM   #5
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Sorry, but...it's terrible, not to mention generic.
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Old 08-10-2007, 08:31 AM   #6
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I don't think it's terrible, but it does need some work.
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