YOUR sweet Vampire Kiss.

[darkangelv]

YOUR sweet Vampire Kiss.


From the Shadows you rise,
rise to the night
Oh what a sweet vision,
oh, what a delight.
I enter your spell,
I no longer fight...
I'm forever lost,
lost in your dark light.

For your blood I crave,
my soul i can no longer save
Can I seek comfort in thy Heart?
My body screams of fire,
my soul burns of flames.
I hunger with desire,
a mere blood shed in your vain.

My sweet vampire,
you are my knight,
bring me your nothingness,
embrace me into this nightmare,
take me as your own,
for i shall never be alone.
As crimson the sky becomes,
into the night you awaken.

Are you real?

Could have I been mistaken?

NO!

That cannot be,
for your poison burn inside of me.
Like a snake…you hiss,
but i would still adore...
YOU sweet Vampire Kiss.

[gothicusmaximus]

This poem achieved what any gothic poem should, instilling in even the most dauntless reader a profound and paralyzing terror- the terror that results from the knowledge that there exist people so impossibly stupid as to produce this work and believe it to be a coherent piece of literary art.
From the sporadically present rhyme scheme to the marked lack of the devices which constitute poetic finesse to the banal subject matter, I was awed.

[Apathy's_Child]

Originally Posted by gothicusmaximus

This poem achieved what any gothic poem should, instilling in even the most dauntless reader a profound and paralyzing terror- the terror that results from the knowledge that there exist people so impossibly stupid as to produce this work and believe it to be a coherent piece of literary art.
From the sporadically present rhyme scheme to the marked lack of the devices which constitute poetic finesse to the banal subject matter, I was awed.

PWNED!!!

Listen to the man, and please, stop posting such crap.

[KontanKarite]

*hugs DarkAngelv*

Ouch, dear. Very ouch.

[Amarantha]

And to the little darkling using large words, A large vocabulary does NOT constitute intelligence.

At all.


You'd do well to mark those words.

[gothicusmaximus]

You don't have to be intelligent to percieve the problems with this poem.

[Apathy's_Child]

Originally Posted by Amarantha

And to the little darkling using large words, A large vocabulary does NOT constitute intelligence.

At all.


You'd do well to mark those words.

Words alone don't, but the use to which they're put to does.

[Clockwork]

Originally Posted by Amarantha

And to the little darkling using large words, A large vocabulary does NOT constitute intelligence.

At all.


You'd do well to mark those words.

Perhaps so; but damn, does it make flaming fun to read.