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Old 11-11-2005, 12:12 AM   #1
ROBERT DAVIDSON
 
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Thumbs down Bluebeard's Woman

BLUEBEARD is a famous French folk-tale about a man who has murdered six of his wives. In most version Bluebeard's seventh wife is rescued in the nick of time by her two brothers. In my version BLUEBEARD'S WOMAN, she neatly resolves her dilemma in her own unique way.

BLUEBEARD'S WOMAN

by ROBERT DAVIDSON

Bluebeard's Woman. Don't open that door.
Don't open that door, your husband said, whatever you do.
Bluebeard's Woman. Don't ever ask - that key no more.
Don't be tempted to have your own way - or forever you'll rue.

Bluebeard's Woman. Don't open that door.
Because you never know what horrors you'll find inside.
Bluebeard's Woman. Don't ever ask - that key no more.
Such ghastly deeds - before you became his sweet seventh bride.

Bluebeard's Woman. Don't open that door.
Temptation is the way he plays his wicked little game.
Bluebeard's Woman. Don't ever ask - that key no more.
Disobey him? Rebel? If you do you'll never be the same.

Bluebeard's Woman. Don't open that door.
Don't open that door, we beg of you, whatever you do.
Bluebeard's Woman. Don't ever ask - that key no more.
Your brothers won't ever get here in time to save you.

Bluebeard's Woman? She opened that door!
'Cause woman today won't obey - nor let no man deceive her.
Bluebeard's Woman. Found all the bones that covered the floor.
Six former wives. Cut up in neat pieces with a meat cleaver.

Bluebeard's Woman. She opened that door.
Now her husband's coming home to kill her as we feared.
Bluebeard's Woman. She had such courage at her core.
She wrestled for his knife, kicked his balls, then sliced off his beard.
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Old 11-11-2005, 12:16 AM   #2
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I enjoyed reading that...! Thanks for sharing.
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Old 11-11-2005, 02:22 PM   #3
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Hi Robert,

Your rhyming is tight except for the second last stanza (her and cleaver). I liked the repitition to build the anticipation but I was hoping for a more substantial end to Bluebeard, lol. I also found the changing rhythm jarring to read but I enjoyed the story. Thanks for posting it.

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